Prick up your hair
Pin back your skin
Such a silly mistake
Left in a tray
It made us feel quite quarrelsome
Pretty and dead
As my wedding bouquet
A neat little row
Like the hem of a dress
Pinning us together
Left like a message under stone
It made me feel quite happy
Stay a while in the alley
It is cool
Laced profane delicious
And fairies in the fire
The fury cleaner
Dust and cheese in the pie
Metal or flesh or souls
The windows gone
Boys have swords
Nobody beats time
Prick up your hair
Pin back your skin
Such a silly mistake
Now I will lock myself out.
I was fascinated to see what you would do with the TdeF prompt! And I wasn't disappointed.
ReplyDeleteThank you J Cosmo - I wasn't quite sure what would turn around either but It managed to squeak out...thank you!
DeleteReads to me like a staccato series of phrases from a walk with a significant female adult ... as if I am on my tricycle and the nattering comments go on above and in my my head marring the sunshine. Imagine being pinned to her?! Imagine being pinned to darkness like a hem on a skirt! I hope the little one doesn't lock herself out for long.
ReplyDeleteThank you Susan...I think you may have summed up j's psyche in a paragraph...It has foxed the medical profession for some time..we were very pleased to be given the opportunity for a cycle ride...thanks
DeleteWhat fantastic images you have painted here Jae. I related to the locking oneself out seeing it was so expensive to get a locksmith to open up! Even coping with the fairies and dragons seem tame.
ReplyDeleteThank you Old Egg...fairies and dragons are a piece of cake...it's people that are tricksy buggers...always fascinated by locksmiths...presumably they can get into any building they desire...maybe they do!
DeleteI love the image of the fury cleaner and dislike her right along with you. "Nobody beats time" can be taken two ways and are both are correct. Lovely.
ReplyDeleteThank you very much Ann...sometimes a bit if furious cleaning can be therapeutic but when you take it up a notch and wear the tabard and frown it can be a bit frightening! Thanks kindly
DeleteThe days of Daisy, Daisy.... have long since gone it seems
ReplyDeleteAlthough we are a little crazy - j and Alice that is..thank you. Jo-hanna!
DeleteI hope the little one is locked out for long.
ReplyDeleteThank you Sheilagh and I hope your vacation has taken a turn for the better :)
Deletenobody beats time..so true beautiful poem Jae Rose:)
ReplyDeleteThank you kindly Arathi :)
DeleteI'd like to try some blue ice cream laced with liquor.
ReplyDeleteAlways plenty to share..thank you kindly Belva..
DeleteYou have such a way with slamming the point home: "Nobody beats time." Thud.
ReplyDeleteSorry Magical! A helping hand up...I hear rabbits with pocket watches may have some sway over time....not too keen on going down that hole again though ;)
DeleteThis one hits close to me. Time robbed me of my bicycle. It took a physical therapist to get me back on.
ReplyDeleteThank you Alice...I am glad you are up and cycling again with the wind in your hair hopefully!
DeleteI loved this, especially "I will carry an opiate bloom, pretty and dead, as my wedding bouquet."
ReplyDeleteThank you very much Sherry...
DeleteJae-Rose,
ReplyDeleteOff track, but fantasic for that excellently formed journey, as usual...
Eileen
Thank you Eileen - you may fall off your bike if I stayed on the track!
DeleteI love the last line...sometimes we need to sit in the silence...of course no key's required...but for starters it's maybe useful thing! ~ Nice, refreshing, especially with blue icecream ;)
ReplyDeleteThank you humbird...silence can be a wonderful thing... Ice cream even better ;)
DeleteVery nice, felt like what goes through my mind as I bike.
ReplyDeleteThank you GL - steady as you go in which case!
Deleteblue icecream!- "mouth watering"... i love the way the repetition at the end is so effective and the way you lock yourself out in the wild open full of fresh possibilities... lovely!!
ReplyDeleteIt is a treat..thank you kindly Arushi..
Deleteonce again I get to see perhaps; a little magic "locked" in mystery...hope you have been doing good,,been away(myself) a little while but I read...glad you are "keeping on keeping on",,,reckon?
ReplyDeleteI was thinking of you just the other day! Very good to see you back and yes...keeping on keeping on...reckon so...thank you
DeleteI have often felt incapable of putting any comment on the contents your brilliant poems weaved through an amazing mind and heart you seem to have been blessed with... so I won't..I carry some words with me...
ReplyDeleteRS:)
Thank you very much Ramesh...we are happy you share our words..i imagine you would turn them into something moon filled..thank you :)
DeleteI like the fury cleaner. ..or the fury anything. What I don't like is drowning in a sea of pious phoney treacled hypocrisy with its cloying gentleness, suffocating the life force of all before it...soft smothering torture by packing a person's nostrils with pristine white blessed feathers and healing oils to the soft strains of a lyre harp and meditative mantras of LURVE.
ReplyDeleteWHAT? Did not just larf and say FUCK did you? Well, that's it..
there will be consequences for you my big hair'd girl... nemesis of the wacko bullshit medico fraternity!)
My Dear Rallentanda..have you been with me this past forty-eight hours..oh yes there were some fuck you's...but never to my friends..with them it's funny exposing the cloying bullshit hypocrisy (that's you :)
DeleteTo be locked out just because the keys are lost. Somewhat terrible to think! Nicely Jae!
ReplyDeleteHank
Depends which side of the door you're on I suppose! Thank you kindly Hank
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