Like a personality
Waiting waiting waiting
All alone in shadow
I am afraid now
Says Alice
Past the spiders
Up the stairs
I did not invite you in or open up the door
She laughs
Naughty nervous crazy
I am shiny as a row of books
Clever as a prison full of words
We will never get there at this rate
You’ll see
Soon enough
The hole in my hand dripping like the martyr
Red red
Dribble down
All is safe
And all is sound
Like falling flower leaves and honey
Stuck stuck sticky
All mixed up
Like our personality
Parcelled in a paper shirt
You’ll see
Soon enough
Like a personality
Like you
My unwelcome little guest.
Friends should laugh with not at you as your fictional Alice seems to. The good and bad in us always tussle for dominance...such is life. As always your intriguing poetry casts a spell on us until we realise it is real life for some.
ReplyDeleteShe can be naughty or nice it's true...I think i need to play with real life friends...she can be a bad influence when she applies herself..thank you Old Egg
DeleteSometimes we don't know where we are going, and everything seems split, eventually all falls in place, never how you thought it would be, but that is life, my little Jae. These seemed to be difficult words, to me...I felt like the piece wrote itself today. I had very little to do with it. Does that sometime happen to you?
ReplyDeleteYes these words came out despite wanting to find something brighter....better out than in as the saying goes though...thank you (for my little Jae especially) - a welcome hug xo
DeleteI like the idea of a prison full of words. Or did you mean a prison made up of words? Slightly different, and much more ominous. Yes, we all want to be real, but there is a price attached.
ReplyDeleteNow that's curious...i think probably the latter now you come to say...and yes..always a price attached...thank you Ann..and for the puzzle!
DeleteI really like "Even chaos has an order" - very nice.
ReplyDeleteThanks very much Misky
DeleteThe lyrical feel - almost innocent, the trigger words from other places "Alice" - "pretties" the rhyming walk that I have taken with you - chilling and wonderful work...
ReplyDeleteThank you kindly Pearl..I hope my comment took...I found your poem so very important...
DeleteIntriguing.You hid the wordle words well in this fantasy (I hope) adventure!
ReplyDeleteThank you Viv...always part real..part fantasy...but still an adventure
DeleteWas she invited or was she not? Yes! (Oh, the ambiguities and complexities of life!)
ReplyDeleteI know..it's a head twister..best to lie down with a cold compress on ones head! ;)
DeleteExcellent! Love the alliterations strewn in there.
ReplyDeleteThank you muchly Leonard
DeleteThis is brilliant.....I love the use of repetition, the use of sounds (reading this out loud provides such a stunning effect)....and it is so interesting in depth of meaning that it can be read multiple times and each time the reader goes deeper, deeper further down, down, down into it. Lovely.
ReplyDeleteWhat a wonderful comment - thank you CC!
DeleteDiamonds and spiders and Alice, Oh my! Split like a personality is brilliant.
ReplyDeleteProbably a bad recipe huh! Thank you kindly Brenda
DeleteI felt like I entered a magical place reading this, Jae. You wouldn't know it was a wordle. I didn't even notice the words. Nice.
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Thank you kindly Pamela..glad you found something magical there xo
DeleteThis reminds me of someone I thought was close, yet remained further away than I could have imagined. These words led us all on a merry chase, the fate of we prisoners of words,
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Unreachable...yep...people can fade and fall yeah like leaves...we can from ourselves too I suppose..yes...we all seemed to relate words and prison...when the opposite is probably true..thank you Elizabeth
DeleteOh it's complicated.
ReplyDeleteAnd then some! Thank you Irene
DeleteI like this very much, especially the first four lines.
ReplyDeleteThank you kindly Shawna
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ReplyDelete'I am shiny as a row of books
Clever as a prison full of words' ~ love these lines. Also about split as split of personality. Cool thought! ~ refreshing write as always xx
Thank you humbird...I suppose if you can write yourself into a prison...you can write yourself out ;)
Deleteseems as though Alice may be rebelling a little - tired of always being sweetness and light? I don't know - maybe it is me projecting my own feelings. Sometimes our different sides leak into each other. Spiders, though scary, are not all completely bad and diamonds can be sharp and cutting and in need of a good cleaning...
ReplyDeleteExactly so Dee - Alice and her host alike are not candy hearted for sure..I like your description of diamonds and spiders...there's a good story there :)
DeleteLove this bittersweet poem, looking forward how this all plays out.
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In guessing not well! But maybe there's hope..thank you kindly Cathy
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