Hold on to your mind Alice
Or they'll pick it clean
Mix it up in jelly and serve it to the crows
No sense
Muffle our speech in sheets
Paper linen gold
Left us in the cold
His rain falls in the dark
Candy kills
That time we stopped
Held it like a chalice
A goblet full of vital signs
I broke away the paper name
Tore it into strips
You sick fuck
Left us in the cold
Defective disconnected disengaged
No sense
Is everything and all
Now I am empty as a dirty page
A filthy poem wrapped around a stolen soul
Hold on to your mind Alice
Or they'll pick it clean
Mix it up in jelly and serve it to the crows.
Many years ago door to door salesman allowed you to pay in installments so was called the tallyman. When he came you hid! I got the same feeling from your words with "the cherry picker is coming, hold on to your mind..." You are such an expert in this inventive writing Jae.
ReplyDeleteThank you Old Egg..suppose I have to be good at something! It was the door to door insurance man in our day...thank you xo
Delete"we make nonsense
ReplyDeleteno sense"
loved the poem specially above mention lines
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Thanks very much Cifar
DeleteHolding on to one's mind can be the hardest thing of all. There ar so many who would rob us of it or bend it to their will.
ReplyDeleteYes...maybe because not everyone is blessed with one....thank you kindly Ann
DeleteThey wont pick my mind clean - it's too dirty to begin with. Even crows are too fussy for that. 'Twould ruin the jelly too. Who was it who said 'of all the things I've lost, I miss my mind the most.'? I'm never too sure how much of your writing is just writing and how much is autobiographical.
ReplyDeleteI don't know..but it's a very god quote...there's a good short story by Douglas Adams where he goes to the lost property window at a station...and can't remember what it is he lost..and when he walks away he realises it was his mind...thank you J Cosmo and surreality aside it's mostly autobiographical...
DeleteRats! I was hoping that wasn't the case. Distant thoughts.
DeleteThank you J Cosmo..as long as I'm writing...i'm ok
DeleteI only have the sense of outrage at this first and second reading - I believe that there are many rich references in "Alice' and green plastic bottles and my mind is not picked clean but thrumming with associations. This begs for more careful and informed reading. A very thought-provocative write :)
ReplyDeleteThank you very much Pearl...i note your professional background....when done well and kindly 'therapy' is just that...when not it's like a robbery of the soul...thank you kindly.. and especially for feeling 'it'
DeleteOh that refrain!
ReplyDeleteThanks Irene..glad you could hear it!
DeleteAh yes...purging the demons while retaining one's essence requires wise and skillful assistance, which can be hard to come by.
ReplyDeleteExtremely hard...thank you kindly Kim xo
DeleteWould it be fair to say that a jellied mind is better than no mind at all?
ReplyDeleteYes I think it would be fair to say that Magical - thank you!
DeleteThank you again for sharing your ability and skill with words. I've been sitting here for over a half hour just letting my mind wonder through the maze you have created. We resonate with what is familiar to our own experience and personal truth. I'm resonating with bits of story, other poets, my granddaughters, and memory. Hope you know that you were in my thoughts when I wrote my own response to these words. We really need to chat and I for one, hope that happens soon. Hugs from Wisconsin, my friend.
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Thank you so Elizabeth - I feel well and truly stuck in the maze..a chat and hug virtual though it maybe would be most treasured...your friend in Devon xo
DeleteI love the opening stanza, and was thrilled to see it repeated. Strong work. Visits here speak to my soul. Thank you.
ReplyDeleteThank you Brenda...I am glad they speak to you and feel thankful to be heard
Delete"...empty as a dirty page..." I have been there.
ReplyDeleteLoved your interview.
I will be back.
Happy Birthday.
Thanks so much Gail..and for the add...so you again soon
Delete"A filthy poem wrapped around a stolen soul"---ouch....that is truly powerful. Wow.
ReplyDeleteThank you Conscious....ouch yep..when spelt out it's a bit grim isn't it
Deletehahaha Blogger my comment left yesterday :) Great poem
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It can be a devious little mite blogger! I do moderate comments though as I used to get lots of spam so sometimes it takes a while..thanks Cathy!
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