Wednesday, 18 January 2012

The Equation of Love

The slivers of bark settle in my hair
They are felling the trees
Cutting off the branches
It is a different kind of dust
That settles
Gently
In my hair
On my coat
I go to the board
It says I will give you rest
A rest from heading down hill
A softer fall of powder
The lesson for today
Carries the weight of my number
37
I am inside it
Watching the reflections
The freak show
Rattling around in potions and candles burning out
I go to her
I smell the wishes like vapours tangled up in the blue of her dress
She holds them tight
Like she holds his beautiful little arms and pure flesh tight
I love the blue
I love her
The one who holds me tight and still lights wishes
For me
I love her

The little black cat crosses paths with the crow
Like an unbalanced equation.
I touch the cat
The crow flies away.
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25 comments:

  1. Anya Padyam18 January 2012 at 10:33

    Its beautifully poignant!

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  2. Old Egg18 January 2012 at 11:28

    This is an unbelievably emotional piece of writing that brought tears to my eyes. It was as though the reader was doing a jigsaw and as each piece was fitted in this overwhelmingly beautiful picture of love emerged. Truly outstanding.

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  3. Sheilagh Lee18 January 2012 at 11:52

    so beautiful you touched me deeply with this poem Jae.

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  4. Ben Ditty18 January 2012 at 13:47

    Another gem :)

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  5. Angel18 January 2012 at 14:56

    Very lyrical.

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  6. Unknown18 January 2012 at 16:23

    Jae,
    The mood is lighter, brighter, more hopeful. I note a change in the essence and meaning of powder, as well as a shift in its appeal.

    The lesson of the day seems to open new vistas, new realities and possibilities. Someone loves and is loved.

    There is blue - gentle, inviting, warm, secure. Beauty, purity and light peek out... sweetly, almost shyly.

    The final stanza? Magnificent! Two omens of good luck, each moving in different manners and directions. Either is a choice to live well, to prosper, to be happy.

    And I am sure the one in blue loves you too!

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  7. Mary18 January 2012 at 17:49

    I hope there are many who still light wishes for you. I know I do, Jae.

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  8. Ann (bunnygirl)18 January 2012 at 20:27

    In my fiction, blue usually means something good. I hope it does for you, too.

    I love the imagery of the cat and the crow. Sometimes animals tell us truths we won't find elsewhere.

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  9. Alice Audrey19 January 2012 at 00:15

    Like an unbalanced equation is going to linger in my mind a while. I can already tell.

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  10. Linda Jacobs19 January 2012 at 05:07

    The ending is surprising but perfect. I like how the black contrasts with the blue. And I like how you pat the cat (accept the darkness) and also let the crow fly away (release some of your darkness). There is a nice softness to this poem.

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  11. Jae Rose19 January 2012 at 08:49

    Thank you for all your wishes and words..kindly..Jae ;)

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  12. Daydreamertoo19 January 2012 at 09:42

    I see a tiny sliver of ..hope. Maybe the tiniest piece yet but, it's there. A calmness, a beginning to care about oneself, and to cherish someone's love. I also see the change in thoughts about the powder, subtle yet, there. This has a certain serenity about it that until now, with barely a glimpse of it here and there at times, everything else I've read of your so far has been missing.
    I hope one day to see that Jae has turned the corner and is free to fly, too.

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  13. Jae Rose19 January 2012 at 10:13

    Thank you Daydreamer..like a Jay Bird! I am glad there was some hope and calm..they are essential ingredients..Jae ;)

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  14. RJ Clarken20 January 2012 at 08:36

    This is just gorgeous. I love your unbalanced equation. Wow.

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  15. Unknown20 January 2012 at 09:58

    love it. love the images in this poem.

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  16. Jae Rose20 January 2012 at 10:24

    Thank you LightVerse and Marita..Jae

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  17. Laurie Kolp20 January 2012 at 14:34

    Another lovely piece, Jae. I especially like:

    I smell the wishes like vapours tangled up in the blue of her dress

    Have a blessed weekend!

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  18. lucychili20 January 2012 at 18:42

    yes blues and love
    and irregular expressions
    peace j

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  19. Jae Rose21 January 2012 at 05:35

    Thank you Laurie..you too..

    Peace back lucychili..

    Jae

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  20. Dee Martin21 January 2012 at 13:56

    Wishes tangled up in the blue of her dress....such a beautiful line. I am sorry I have not been around. My husband has been I'll but I have missed your words. I hope you are okay :)

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  21. Jae Rose22 January 2012 at 06:41

    Thanks Dee..I hope your husband is better..always good to see you..no matter when..Jae x

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  22. annell422 January 2012 at 11:21

    Jea in this piece you are surrounded with love, in the blue dress, in your arms and with the cat and the crow. I love the images you have created. xoxoxoxoxo

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  23. Jae Rose22 January 2012 at 11:32

    Yes..I felt the love..and found it..thank you Annell..

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  24. Belva Rae Staples25 January 2012 at 03:15

    I like this. It has such a hopeful tone and the imagery is wonderful.

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  25. Jae Rose26 January 2012 at 10:56

    Thanks Belva..Jae

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